Monday, March 2, 2020
Five Words You Can Cut
Five Words You Can Cut Five Words You Can Cut Five Words You Can Cut By Ali Hale One of the best ways to make your writing stronger is to cut unnecessary words. Many people tend to over-write, often in a similar way to how they would speak. Words creep in that add no meaning and can make a piece of writing sound vague and woolly rather than confidence and precise. Just This is one of the worst offenders for me. I over-use it in email, typing: ââ¬Å"I just thought Iââ¬â¢d drop you a noteâ⬠¦Ã¢â¬ ââ¬Å"Just writing to askâ⬠¦Ã¢â¬ ââ¬Å"If you could just give me a callâ⬠¦Ã¢â¬ In almost every case, striking out the word ââ¬Å"justâ⬠will make a sentence stronger. It tends to make you sound either desperate when applied to yourself (ââ¬Å"I just wondered if you couldâ⬠¦Ã¢â¬ ) or demanding when applied to the other person (ââ¬Å"If you would justâ⬠¦Ã¢â¬ ). Really Like ââ¬Å"justâ⬠, this is another word which can frequently be cut. Itââ¬â¢s often found partnering ââ¬Å"justâ⬠, in which case you might want to rewrite the whole sentence. ââ¬Å"You can really improve byâ⬠¦Ã¢â¬ ââ¬Å"You donââ¬â¢t really want toâ⬠¦Ã¢â¬ ââ¬Å"Iââ¬â¢m really just trying to â⬠¦Ã¢â¬ Using the word ââ¬Å"reallyâ⬠about yourself makes it sounds as though you believe the other person is unsure of your intentions; ââ¬Å"Iââ¬â¢m really writing the reportâ⬠can sound defensive. And using it about someone else can sound patronising ââ¬â phrases like ââ¬Å"thatââ¬â¢s really good!â⬠are best kept for the kindergarten. Quite This insidious word tends to water down the meaning of a sentence or, worse, make it unclear. It usually means ââ¬Å"a bitâ⬠as in ââ¬Å"I quite liked itâ⬠, but can also mean ââ¬Å"completelyâ⬠as in ââ¬Å"Quite right.â⬠Most people have little difficulty understanding those, but sentences like ââ¬Å"I was quite outragedâ⬠can be taken either way. ââ¬Å"Iââ¬â¢d quite like you to â⬠¦Ã¢â¬ ââ¬Å"Iââ¬â¢m feeling quite upset about it.â⬠ââ¬Å"I donââ¬â¢t think you quite understandâ⬠There are some circumstances where you may well want to keep the word ââ¬Å"quiteâ⬠, particularly when trying to justify something over-running. ââ¬Å"Quiteâ⬠is useful in suggesting both ââ¬Å"almost thereâ⬠and ââ¬Å"soonâ⬠, and saying ââ¬Å"The files arenââ¬â¢t quite ready yet â⬠¦Ã¢â¬ implies it wonââ¬â¢t be much longer, whereas ââ¬Å"The files arenââ¬â¢t ready yetâ⬠can sound like stone-walling. Perhaps Like many of the words above, ââ¬Å"perhapsâ⬠makes your writing sound uncertain. It can obscure meaning, or weaken an otherwise powerful statement, and often causes confusion. ââ¬Å"Perhaps we could meet at twelve for lunch.â⬠ââ¬Å"And then perhaps youââ¬â¢d like to â⬠¦Ã¢â¬ ââ¬Å"Perhaps if I â⬠¦Ã¢â¬ The main problem in all these cases is that the word ââ¬Å"perhapsâ⬠means your intention is unclear. If you email someone suggesting ââ¬Å"Perhaps we could meet at twelve for lunchâ⬠, are you proposing a lunch meeting, or just idly wondering whether itââ¬â¢s possible? The ââ¬Å"perhapsâ⬠also makes it unclear what part of the suggestion is in doubt; do you think twelve might not be the best time, or do you suspect the other person wonââ¬â¢t want to get lunch? That This is another word which creeps into my writing where itââ¬â¢s not needed. Itââ¬â¢s fine when necessary, but can often be cut without any loss of meaning ââ¬â usually when itââ¬â¢s preceded by a noun. ââ¬Å"This is the house that Jack built.â⬠ââ¬Å"Can you remember the time that we asked people to arrive?â⬠ââ¬Å"I liked the design that you came up with.â⬠Make sure you donââ¬â¢t cut valid instances of the word, usually where ââ¬Å"thatâ⬠comes before the noun. ââ¬Å"I need that document by fiveâ⬠makes sense, ââ¬Å"I need document by fiveâ⬠is only safe in a very informal context and if youââ¬â¢re sure the other person knows which document you mean. Putting it all together If you email someone with ââ¬Å"I really just wondered if perhaps you could send those documents that I mentioned quite soon.â⬠you come across as diffident, uncertain and sound like youââ¬â¢re babbling. Itââ¬â¢s also unclear whether you do need those documents straight away, or whether youââ¬â¢re simply enquiring whether they could be sent soon. But if you delete the five unnecessary words, youââ¬â¢ll get ââ¬Å"I really just wondered if perhaps you could send those documents that I mentioned quite soon.â⬠ââ¬Å"I wondered if you could send those documents I mentioned soon.â⬠This sentence is much clearer, more concise, and likely to elicit a quick response. So when youââ¬â¢ve written an email, article, report or even a piece of fiction, check through for the words just, really, quite, perhaps and that ââ¬â and see if you can improve the piece by cutting them out. Want to improve your English in five minutes a day? Get a subscription and start receiving our writing tips and exercises daily! Keep learning! Browse the Writing Basics category, check our popular posts, or choose a related post below:12 Greek Words You Should KnowDeck the HallsWhen to use "an"
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